MODEL B
MODEL A
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Style in reports
1
Read the rubric then the two
reports. Which is not
appropriate? Give reasons.
Think about:
layout
,
grammar
,
style
and
points not covered
.
You are a member of an
environmental group which is
planning to produce a leaflet to
be distributed to the public to
raise their awareness of the group
and its activities and attract new
members. The leader of the group
has asked you to write a report,
suggesting what information and
photographs to include.
Write your
report
(140-190 words).
2
Look at the appropriate model again. Underline linkers and
suggest alternatives. Then find formal words/phrases which
mean the same as the informal ones given in the table from
the inappropriate model.
Dear Mr Smith,
I’m writing this report to tell
you what I think is a great idea for
the new leaflet you want to make.
To start with, I really like being a
member of Eco-Friends and I have
met a lot of really nice people and
I think it’s a good idea to let more
people know what we do and get
more people to join.
Other Environmental Groups
There’s no other group that’s as
good as Eco-Friends. We do a lot
for the local area and the
environment and the other groups
are just rubbish.
History of the Group
Eco-Friends started in 1995. It has
just got bigger and better since then
with nice people doing nice things
for the nice wildlife in our area.
That’s about all, I think. Good
luck with the leaflet. I hope it turns
out alright.
Yours sincerely,
Jack Jones
To:
Simon Smith
From:
Jack Jones
Subject:
New leaflet
Date:
18 th June 20....
Purpose
The purpose of this report is to make recommendations
regarding which aspects of the Eco-Friends environmental
group and its work should be included in the proposed new
leaflet to promote the group and attract new members.
Local concerns
One suggestion would be to include information about local
issues that we can help with. By pointing out local problems
and how we can solve them, people will begin to realise the
positive effect we can have in the local community.
Group Activities
We should also include examples of successful local
campaigns we have organised. It would be a good idea to
include some ‘before and after’ photographs of last year’s
clean-up campaign in Baxter Bay, for example. Doing this
would prove that our work is important for the local
community. Furthermore, we could include information about
fundraising events we have organised and what we have been
able to achieve with the money raised.
Membership Information
We should have a simple form to fill in for people who wish
to join our group. We could also offer a free T-shirt. By doing
this I believe we would attract a lot of new members.
Conclusion
All in all, I believe that if we include some of the suggestions
above, we will be able to create a very attractive and
informative leaflet. As a result, the public will have a clear
idea of the work we do and hopefully will be interested in
joining our group.
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• I’m writing this report to
tell you what I think.
• It’s a good idea to let
more people know what
we do.
• We do a lot for the local
area.
• That’s about all.
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