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Tom felt strangely afraid as he got into the canoe. There was no reason for his
fear. The sun 1) shone/was shining and a cool wind was blowing as he set off on
an amazing canoeing trip in the Florida Everglades with his friend, Matthew.
The first part of the trip was fun and relaxing, but suddenly, the water
2) had started/started flowing unbelievably fast. Suddenly, to their horror, the
canoe capsized and they fell in the river! They 3) were grabbing/grabbed the
canoe while the rushing water swept them along faster and faster.
After a short while, the water became calm again. But just as they climbed
back into the canoe, Tom froze in fear. A huge alligator 4) stared/was staring
at them! They 5) didn’t know/weren’t knowing what to do, but then Tom
remembered his mobile phone in his raincoat pocket. He called the canoe hire
shop and half an hour later a helicopter came to rescue them.
“You were very lucky the alligator didn’t attack you in the water!” a rescue
worker said calmly to them. They 6) had never felt/never felt so relieved
before!
A
B
C
D
Writing A story 2f
Writing Bank 2 p. WB2
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Rubric analysis
Read the rubric and look at
the underlined words. Then
answer the questions.
1 Who is going to read your
story?
2 Who is it going to be about?
3 What tenses should you use?
4 What must you include in
your story?
5 What could your story be
about?
A your favourite place to go
canoeing
B a canoe trip where
something went wrong
1
Stories wanted
We are looking for stories for our
new English-language magazine for
young people. Your story must
begin with this sentence: Tom felt
strangely afraid as he got into
the canoe. Write your story
(120-160 words). Your story must
include:
• an alligator.
• a mobile phone.
Model analysis
a) Read the story and choose
the correct tenses (1-6). Is it a
first- or third-person narrative?
b) Match the paragraphs (A-D)
to the descriptions (1-4).
the main event
setting the scene (main
characters, place, event,
weather, feelings etc)
incidents leading up to the
main event
what happened in the end,
feelings of the main
character(s)
2
1
2
3
4
b) Use the linking words first , then , next, after that,
suddenly, after a short while, finally to give your partner
a short summary of the story.
1 Where and when did the story take place?
2 What was the weather like?
3 Who was the main character?
4 How did he feel?
a) Read the paragraph and answer the questions. 5
Read the tip. How does the writer set the scene in Ex. 2? 4
One Tuesday morning last spring, John was standing at the
train station in the pouring rain. He had already been waiting
for the train for an hour and he was feeling really annoyed.
Setting the scene
When we write a story, we begin by setting the scene. To do this,
we imagine we are looking at a picture and try to describe the
place (where), the time (when), the weather, the people involved
and their feelings.
The canoe capsized.
Tom phoned the canoe hire shop.
They got back into the canoe.
Tom and Matthew set out on a canoeing trip.
Tom saw an alligator staring at them.
The water swept them down the river.
They fell into the river.
A helicopter came to rescue them.
A
B
D 1
E
F
G
C
H
a) List the events (A-H) in the
order they happened. Which is
the climax event?
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Variety of writing tasks
Model
composition
and model
analysis
Activities
designed to
help students
decode rubrics